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1 Cole Amaranth(Finished) on Sat May 28, 2016 6:58 am

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Name: Cole Amaranth
Age: 18
Birthday: August 24th
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Height: 6'2"
Weight: 160 lbs
Face Claim: Main Character - FF XIV

STR: 4
DEF: 3
RES: 3
SPT: 1

Major: Combat
Likes: Women, Music, Fighting
Dislikes: Tradition, Weaklings, Authority Figures
Fears: Failure, The Dark, Personal Attachment
Overall Personality: A Roguish charmer with an affection for women and good times, Cole acts as his conscience and code of ethics dictates with little regard for others opinions and beliefs. That's not to say he can't be understanding, rather that he prefers doing things his own way often to the exclusion of others tactics. He has a deep-seated distrust of authority and tradition, disliking the former for attempting to control him and the latter as an additional means of control; as he sees the world people should be able to govern their own lives as they see fit without laws and mores controlling them. He harbours an intense dislike for those who rely on others to the exclusion of personal development, but because of that harbours a deep-seated fear of personal failure and how that will impact him personally and the perception of him by his peers.

Aura type: Healing
Aura Color: Duke Blue
Semblance: Aura Perception( Cole can perceive the spiritual auras and the shifting hues related to emotional states. Grimm's appear as black holes within his sensory range. Useful for tracking and investigation).
Item 1: Arash(+10 Damage, Rank 1). A Steel Composite Longbow with black leather grip. comes with a black leather back quiver that can carry 240 arrows.
Item 2: A Set of Studded Leather Armour(+10 Defense).

History and Sample
Cole's upbringing was hardly ideal by the standards of the time; growing up orphaned and on the streets of the industrial city of Arrachas along Vale's southern coast, he struggled to survive amidst the corruption and greed that oppressed the city-state. For hundreds of years the city's economy and government had been dominated by the interests and aims of eight noble families that had historically governed the city. That precedence, that unquestioning following of tradition had allowed these families to oppress and subjugate the lower classes for centuries while they simply took it, resigned to their traditional role in society.

Cole resisted. He became a thief, true; robbing from the criminal bosses and noble families in equal measures. But he used those proceeds to provide for those he could, giving them food and other essentials. The upper classes increasingly began to target the poor via unjust incarceration and random acts of violence in the hopes of sussing the "terrorist" that dared to challenge their authority. While this may not have had the desired effect, it did succeed at least in making Cole more aggressive and reckless in his strikes against... which unfortunately resulted in the capture of him and over 20 of his associates in a raid; of them, 13 were executed while the other 7 are still rotting in a maximum security prison located in Arrachas.

But such a fate did not await Cole. Originally the nobles planned to publicly executed him as a show of their power... had it not been for the intervention of the newly appointed Regional Administrator for Arrachas. free of the nobilities corrupting influence he exercised all of his power to have Cole and his associated exonerated of their crimes, aware as he was of the deep-seated corruption within the city; unfortunately he succeeded only in having Cole freed... on the condition he be trained as a Hunter far, far away from the city. Cole has done what he can to make the most of his new situation, but bitterness and resentment still hangs heavy over him, not to mention his deep-seated distrust for authority figures....

RP Sample:
"The Chaos Den. The only safe haven in this entire cesspit of a city where nobles and commoners can be free to indulge their vice of choice. Course the minute a commoner steps outside they run the risk of getting beat down by bored rich kids simple because they can. To say I hate it wouldn't be fair, but to say I love it wouldn't be right either; I tolerate it... because I know it represents both everything right and everything wrong about Arrachas today."

Cole let loose his arrow. It glided silently through smog laden air for a scant second before striking the wall of the club, pulling the attached rope tightly. Cole tested the rope by strumming and pulling on it to see how secure it was; plenty, as it would seem. Latching his bow to his back he gripped the rope firmly with both hands while encircling the other end with his ankles for added grip... and began inching his way slowly from the rooftop he was one over to the Chaos Den's.

Last edited by Maester1216 on Mon May 30, 2016 5:29 pm; edited 4 times in total

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2 Re: Cole Amaranth(Finished) on Sat May 28, 2016 12:05 pm

Just a wee little bump to say that he's ready for review.

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3 Re: Cole Amaranth(Finished) on Sat May 28, 2016 3:08 pm

Just want to be clear that seeing one's aura =/= seeing one's semblance just by looking at them ^^ Outside that app is good.

"Call me short and your life'll get a whole lot shorter."
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4 Re: Cole Amaranth(Finished) on Sat May 28, 2016 6:50 pm

Now that I think about it the Semblance wouldn't be particularly useful against Grimm given they have no soul. What would be a good ability for tracking? It's a utility semblance I'd like to have for this guy(he's like a thief or a ranger in combat style).

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5 Re: Cole Amaranth(Finished) on Sun May 29, 2016 6:25 pm

Bump for edits, ready for the second round of reviews(changed his semblance and Aura/Health Spread).

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6 Re: Cole Amaranth(Finished) on Mon May 30, 2016 4:55 pm

Just a little bump to indicate I'm done with character edits.

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7 Re: Cole Amaranth(Finished) on Mon May 30, 2016 5:23 pm

All is good but again the semblance, sensing something three minutes ahead of time or the likes of hearing forty miles away is too difficult to keep track of. Also the fact that upping sense is essentially like an "Auto dodge." I'd recommend going back to your prior semblance, however you could mention that as grimm have no real life force/aura they appear as holes in your tracking vision. Ultimately though you do need something different to what you have now. Bump when fixed ^^

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8 Re: Cole Amaranth(Finished) on Mon May 30, 2016 5:30 pm

bumped. I'm not really of the relationship between Aura's an emotional states, but I can change it if they're isn't one.

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9 Re: Cole Amaranth(Finished) on Mon May 30, 2016 5:42 pm


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