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1 Onyx Forte (Needs Approval) on Tue Sep 06, 2016 7:10 pm

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Basic info
Name: Forte Piano
Age: 18
Birthday: 10/31
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Height: 5'11''
Weight: 150 lbs
Face Claim:

Aura 150|50 HP

Major: Academic Major
Likes: Music, Vale, Piano, Tacos, and Cool Atlas Military Technology
Dislikes: Boredom, Sitting still, Losing, and Tofu
Fears: War, Disease, and Failure
Overall Personality: When you see Onyx, you tend to see a cheerful, humorous, and sociable young man who laughs and makes too many bad jokes. On the rare occasion that you catch the other side of Onyx, you realize he's depressed, apathetic, and just a tad bit crazy.

Yep, he's bipolar. As a result people who spend lots of time with Onyx end up being confused as to what his actual personality is like. In all honesty, Onyx doesn't know either. When he's in a good mood, he thinks his depression is just a result of exhaustion, and that he'll be back to a good mood in no time. When he's in his bad moods, however, he believes his good moods are just a front that he puts on in front of his "friends."

So is he a normal kid? Or is he a depressed sociopath? That's for you to decide.

Aura type: Recovery
Aura Color: Piano Black
Semblance: Portal. Onyx can teleport to any given location that he can see. If Onyx is moving during the teleportation, he retains his momentum afterwards, even if the direction he is moving in has changed. (Ex. If he is falling from the sky, he can place a portal entry on the ground and an exit going sideways, so the momentum from falling is transferred to vertical movement.)

Item 1: Hard-Light-Generator: Grand Piano
Similar to Velvet's weapon, it utilizes Hard-Light technology to render a piano wherever Onyx wants to place it. Since his Hard-Light-Generator doesn't have to change form, it's much more durable and can be used more consistently. Onyx uses the soundwaves from the piano to attack, as well as lure to sleep more simple-minded Grimm.

Item 2: Oscillation Blade
When Onyx can't use Grand Piano because he needs to be mobile, he uses Oscillation Blade. The Oscillation Blade has a black handguard with 3 white keys. It's also missing a blade. When Onyx presses one of the keys, the air along the "blade" of the sword start Oscillating, also producing a high-pitched sound. Depending on how many keys Onyx is pressing down on, the length of the sword varies from dagger to shortsword to longsword.

History and Sample

Ever since he was a small child, Onyx had been told by his parents of the strange and mythical tales of the Remnant of past. No, not legends of ancient Remnant, but of the life before the Great War.

Back then, the entirety of the Vytal Continent was united under one Kingdom, and the Grimm were pushed out into the far reaches. Back then, the food was bountiful; the water was sweet; the houses were magnificent, and most importantly, the artwork was simply breath-taking. Culture had reached a new high as the wealthy donated more and more into the arts.

It was back then when the Forte family name was known throughout Vytal. They were extremely talented musicians that could capture the essence of the beauty around them and amplify in performance. The Forte Family prospered as the rich showered them with gifts and luxuries.

Then came the Great War. Culture was eradicated from the land as tyrants ruled their little fiefdoms, confident in their righteousness. The Forte family was forced to fight, and for the first time ever, their instruments were converted into weapons. Wielding the once captivating music, their opponents fell under the hypnosis of the sounds. Fearing the great power of the Forte family, they were hunted down...
until almost none were left.

Onyx is one of the few remaining survivors of the Forte family. And he has sworn not to avenge his family, but to make his family name great again. Not only that, he will do it by using music as a gateway to the soul, not as a weapon.
RP Sample:

Onyx was enjoying his daily walk in the forest along with his morning coffee when he noticed a low growl coming from behind him. As he turned he realized it was an Ursa, hungry for his blood.
Onyx looked at the Ursa lumbering towards him. He wondered for a second how can it seem so clumsy and yet move so quickly. As he was contemplating this strange phenomenon, the Ursa descended upon him and took a wide right swipe.

With a sudden WOOSH Onyx disappeared. The Ursa looked around the clearing, confused at the escape of his prey.

A buzzing sound emanated from above the Ursa. As it looked up into a blue outline of a sunny sky, it was then quickly crushed by the grand piano made of hard light.

As Onyx stepped off of the piano bench, he proceeded to finish his coffee.

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2 Re: Onyx Forte (Needs Approval) on Sat Mar 11, 2017 1:34 am

Hey there Lethal Pianist. It's been a bit since you posted this, and I'm sorry for the long wait. I've been modded very recently, and I noticed your app seems nearly completed. We just have a few changes to make.

The first is that you don't have any skills listed. I think this change was made before you made your app originally, but now each app must pick a single skill they excel at and a single skill they don't do so well. This current list can be found here, but for future reference it is the topic titled 'Skill List' in the 'Rules and Information' section.

It also appears that your image code at the top didn't quite work out, so a quick fix to that would be nice.

Not to be THAT guy, but I did a quick count, and while your Personality meets the 100 Word quota, your History and RP Sample do not meet their quotas (falling at 266/300 and 145/150 respectfully). I know it's not by much, but if you could maybe fluff them up a little bit, or maybe even come up with a super cool addition, it would be appreciated.

I saved the meaty part for last. The two items you have chosen cannot be approved as they are written now. First off, sound is a tricky thing to work with here at Syne Academy. You may notice it under the 'Banned Semblances' section, so this would clearly apply to any sound-based weapons. However, I have experience with this issue and found a way to make it work out, approved by Leena herself. Since most people cannot see sound, and the effects of sound happen when they are heard instead of felt, it falls under auto-hit territory...and that's simply not allowed. However, if you made the sound waves visible (maybe appearing similar to how the piano looks, or maybe have the Oscillation Blade [sweet name btw] effectively have the appearance of a lightsaber), this would make it so that your opponent still has a chance to avoid your attack.

The second half of this issue is that you can only start with one weapon, meaning you would have to pick either the piano or the blade. Your second item can be either Dust, Physical Armor, or Magical Armor.

I hope you see this and make the required changes, as your character seems really cool, and I'd like to RP with you in the future! ^_^

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