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1 Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) on Wed Sep 14, 2016 9:55 pm

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Basic info
Name: Topaz Monroe
Age: 18
Birthday: April 11th
Gender: Male
Race: Hyena Faunus
Height: 6'4"
Weight: 221lbs
Face Claim: Iwatooshi - Touken Ranbu

Stats
STR: 5
DEF: 3
RES: 3
SPT: 2
Aura 150|150 HP

Personality
Major: Combat
Likes: High Tempos, Physical Activity, Newspaper Comics
Dislikes: Long-winded Speakers, Quiet Folk, Sticky Things
Fears: Death by Natural Means, Killing on Accident, Being Held Back on
Overall Personality: "Overbearing" is perhaps the greatest word that can be used to describe Topaz. His persona is almost fitting of that of a bully, but it can be seen further that he wants people to be honest with themselves and others, and if you aren't shouting your opinions to the skies? You're lying to yourself, in Topaz's eyes. Even so, boredom comes easily to him, and sometimes actions do speak louder than words. Rarely found in one place for too long, his strength lies in spontaneity. In battle, he has earned a reputation as 'The Giggling One' -- do not mistake this for him enjoying such a thing. It is an uncontrollable nervous reaction, and typically spells fear of defeat on his end.

Abilities
Aura Type: Power.
Aura Color: Orange.
Semblance: Damage. Unnamed. Topaz's semblance is a ranged attack that allows him to fire a blast of poisonous liquid from his mouth, in a sickly green color. Range. 15 feet, short-ranged with a small arc or 5-foot spread. 1 to 1 Damage Ratio of SP spent, up to 20. Chance to cause Poison Status.
Item 1: Weapon. Sip o' Hemlock. A naginata with a seven foot shaft and two foot blade, the length and weight of this weapon allow Topaz to keep his enemies at reach and even polevault over them in close quarters. However, though he has plans, it is naught but a simple weapon and needs much more development to be up to his dream.
Item 2: Armor. A simple breastplate hidden within his many layers of clothing.

History and Sample
History:
Born to Yolk and Svaltur Monroe, Topaz was the younger brother to Variscite -- better known as Varis -- Monroe. The two were close, but had quite different views on life. Varis, favored by his father, was quiet and intelligent, and worked hard but 'played' little. Topaz, on the other hand, was favored by his eccentric and extraverted mother, whom he resembled quite closely. His father, Svaltur, was and still is a Huntsmen of high caliber who, being the inheritor of the Monroe lineage, as is tradition, chose the eldest child -- Varis -- to take on the legacy of the name.
Topaz was infuriated, but had to accept it, and begrudgingly congratulated his elder by eight years. To compensate, however, he began training harder than ever, and developed a rather balanced style of fighting which used the range of his weapon to his major advantage. His weapon, Sip o’ Hemlock, was developed with help from his father and mother alike, who both supported his passion for what he wished to pursue. His father, however, was quite hard on him, as his cynical outlook – brought into being through years of fighting as a Huntsmen – dictated Topaz needed to be pushed to his very limit in order to survive.
Due to this, Topaz has several healed scars that were inflicted upon him in the practical training pushed by his father. Yolk, though she opposed this, helped in direct training as well – though, it was more on the side of Aura, Semblance, and generally useful things for the battlefield. This included application of bandages, pep talks, and so on, as she believed Topaz had the potential to become a leader with his outgoing and confident personality. Svaltur doubted this, somewhat, if due to his son’s knack for trouble and causing it for himself and others.
It was during this practical training that, due to the observance of several other Huntsmen, Topaz earned the nickname, ‘The Giggling One’. It was mostly in part to one of them not knowing the young man’s name, but it surely stuck, and word spread slowly of a rising Huntsman who literally laughs in the face of death. Unbeknownst to them, the giggling is a nervous tick which his mother shares. Now grown enough to do so, he has applied to and is currently waiting to be accepted into Syne Academy.
RP Sample:
Topaz was simply... bored. Oh, for Grimm's sake, he hated being bored! Rising from the place he'd planted himself to wait for the others -- he always got ahead somehow -- he would turn to face the tree he had previously been leaning against. Without even a word, a grin split the chasm that revealed the dozens of canines which littered his maw, and a hand shot out to grasp at the insect which was simply minding its own business. It squirmed in his grasp, but at no avail! Its minuscule strength was nothing compared to Topaz's massive body! Well, massive when compared to the poor little beetle...
Topaz chuckled quietly, whispering to the thing as though it could understand, "Don'tcha worry there, little ffffriend... I ain't gonna hurt ya!" He would then proceed to place the invertebrate atop his cranium, and look back to the tree. With that terrifying grin still tearing his face open, he would quickly cling to it and begin climbing, as the insect clung to his head for dear life. Topaz would ascend the tree within a few moments and place the beetle on a branch, at which point it would scurry away. Reclining once more against the bark, within the shade and leaves, the hyena sighed and closed his eyes. "Where in Remnant are they?"



Last edited by KatyushaBby on Thu Sep 22, 2016 7:56 pm; edited 4 times in total (Reason for editing : Updated for DoT Semb and Approval!)

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2 Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) on Sun Sep 18, 2016 7:14 pm

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Bumpin'.

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3 Second on Wed Sep 21, 2016 4:51 pm

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Bump two!

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4 Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) on Wed Sep 21, 2016 9:05 pm

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Hi i'll be grading your app

The only thing I see that would need change is about your semblance. For the damage over time to work, you'd need to precise that your semblance can poison somehow (like an emanation of gas coming from the acid) and you'd need to refer to the Status Effect for more detail about that. Also you can go to the max ratio of 1/1 up to 20, we don't reduce the damage if you wish to have an element/status ^^

So reword your semblance to add the poison details and you'll be good to go ^^


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5 Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) on Wed Sep 21, 2016 9:24 pm

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How 'bout now?

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6 Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) on Wed Sep 21, 2016 9:46 pm

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Not quite, you can't automatically poison someone, when you attack them there's a chance of poisoning. If your attack lands on your target, the target rolls a dice to determine if they are poisoned, which is explained in the status effect page


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7 Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) on Wed Sep 21, 2016 9:51 pm

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From what I read, it's not explained there. But I'll take your word.

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8 Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) on Wed Sep 21, 2016 9:53 pm

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Wait no that's because I'm an idiot. Sorry.

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9 Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) on Wed Sep 21, 2016 10:26 pm

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You still need to change the description of your semblance though, rathe rthan "DoT, 5 damage per post" you should write "Chance to cause Poison Status"


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10 Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) on Wed Sep 21, 2016 10:28 pm

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I will, when I get the chance. Mobile currently so the edit function isn't working right.

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11 Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) on Wed Sep 21, 2016 10:55 pm

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I see, bump when changed then, you'll be ready to be approved after that ^^


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12 Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) on Thu Sep 22, 2016 7:56 pm

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Final bump, hopefully!

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13 Re: Topaz Monroe (Needs Approval) on Tue Sep 27, 2016 7:19 pm

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Sorry for the long wait, I've been busy with life... >.<||| Approved ^^


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