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1 Aednat Shishune, sword maiden on Tue Nov 15, 2016 10:17 pm

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Basic info
Name: Aednat Shishune
Age: 17
Birthday: unknown, presumably 7/15
Gender: female
Race: kitsune faunus has fox ears and nine tails
Height: 5'
Weight: 100
Face Claim:  found off Google https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/564x/1c/8b/85/1c8b857bf817003b7c455f083947edf8.jpg

Stats
STR:5
DEF:1
RES:1
SPT:5
Aura 250|5HP

Personality
Major: Dust
Likes: books, music, gardening, cooking, keeping to herself, being with a real friend if possible
Dislikes: ignorant racist people, Atlas (borderline psychotic level of hatred), White Fang, people pulling rank on her, her heterochromia (right eye is silver, the left is gold)
Fears: finding out the truth about her parents, men...As in freezes up when one tries to talk to her, losing friends, people finding out that she was a child soldier for the White Fang
Overall Personality: 


Reserved: Aednat is soft spoken and a serious wallflower. Most people mistake this for shyness but really it's because she has grown up keeping to herself and being taught that letting your emotions show is a bad thing. If there is something she is passionate about, she will go into great detail about said item but keeps herself in a constant state of calm. The only time she has let herself show emotion to others is when Atlas is mentioned. She REALLY hates Atlas

Passionate: as mentioned above, even when she is passionate about something, she doesn't let herself get excited. regardless of her emotional state, she speaks in in a near monotone voice even if she is talking about, say, a really good book and how the movie adaptation sucks worse than a dust snorter on wind dust. However,  if the kingdom of Atlas is mentioned she will fly off the handle and give a major tongue lashing to the offender. afterwards she feels bad and will try to apologize after she has calmed down. Her hatred of Atlas and racists overrides her fears.

Kind: Aednat has gone through a lot in her life. She feels deep empathy for anyone she sees in need of help and will try to aid them. provided there aren't men involved in the process. or from Atlas. or racist.

Persevering: Aednat survived way to much to just give up when things go bad. She will push herself to the limit whenever possible, often going a bit too far in her endless quest to prove herself to the world. She has, on several occasions, put herself In the hospital because she refuses to admit defeat. like ever.

Skills:
Good at: cooking
Bad at: social interaction

Abilities
Aura type: recovery
Aura Color: ice blue
Semblance: Fox Fire: Aednat's name literally means "little fire" as such, she can create blue fire from her aura. Unfortunately,  because it was forcefully unlocked, Aednat cannot use her semblance for direct attack or defense as of now. Instead, she can create a firebird named Artimis which she can use to attack, defend, or scout by seeing through it's eyes. The bird can be as small as a wren or as large as a hawk, but it has to be summoned at that size, so she can't summon Artimis the size of a nut hatch and then make it grow or shrink. she would have to dispell and resummon to make it change size


Artimis
Hp: 2
Attack: 4
Ap cost: 30

Item 1: Rage, a massive sword with teeth on the back edge. She found it in an ancient shrine shortly after joining white fang. When sheathed, or drawn by anyone other than Aednat,  it appears as an ordinary katana. When she draws it, it changes its appearance. 
sheathed/ordinary:

drawn by Aednat:
Item 2: Purity, a ring that Aednat had been found with and had kept on a necklace until she could wear it on her hand. It creates a thin barrier around her entire body when she is wearing it .tier 1 physical protection

History and Sample
History:
found on the doorstep of a convent in Atlas, Aednat was said to he born under a cursed star. Being the only faunus in the orphanage, she was subject to cruel treatment from from the other girls who lived there. When she turned seven, a wealthy looking man came and took her, claiming claiming to be a relative. As soon as she was in his house, he became an abusive tyrant who forced her to work like like a slave until she turned thirteen when she was "promoted" to becoming his personal aide. This lasted less than as month as a group of White Fang vigilantes showed up one night and killed her master. Aednat then had the honor of becoming a member of the organization that had been her salvation. There she learned how to protect herself and found Rage at an ancient shrine during training. For four years, she was subjected to brutal training and became became the first of many child soldiers the faction leader was collecting to create an army to take over Atlas. The man's delusions of grandeur were ended violently when the military stormed his stronghold, killing many that Aednat had trained and grown up with. Disgusted by the White Fang's inability to operate against an armed enemy, she deserted and became became a traveling sword for hire. At first, it seems like she had finally gotten a lucky break, but then a series of  events that she has since actively suppressed made made her learn the error and dangers of being a lone girl wandering around the world. It may have been pure chance,  or possibly divine Intervention,  but a faunus huntress based in Bellmuse rescued her and brought Aednat to the small island kingdom. She still doesn't know the name name of name of her rescuer from that day, but she has made made a point to seek out and find them.
RP Sample:
She could smell the stale breath of of the of the people around her. She tried to break free of the ropes, only only to get a swift kick in the ribs. She stopped and lay still, letting the guard think she had given up. She slowly reached into a secret pocket In her shorts where she kept a small knife for situations like this. Several agonizing minutes of cutting finally weakened the rope to the point of breaking. She gave a strong tug and it snapped, allowing her to use her hands again. She quickly untied her legs again nd got up, reaching for her sword. When she drew it, it became a massive,  powerful blade. Something Something the slavers couldn't know because they had captured her while she was asleep andwhen they drew Rage, it looked like a common katana. She had made a few steps when a hand grabbed her and an arm went across her throat, "none of that now, you're worth worth a pretty penny unharmed and it's bad manners to spoil merchandise." She could feel his hands wander as he tried to rub his face against her neck in in what she assumed was supposed to be an amorous fashion. it more or less seemed like a fish trying to be a monkey. corse shouts and laughter surrounded her as she tried to break free. Lack of air was starting to take its toll as her vision darkened. She could feel her fire bursting out, screams. burnt flesh. "YOU MONSTER!"


Aednat awoke with a start. The nightmares kept coming and even though she was safe in the Syne Academy girls dorm, she felt like she was vulnerable, "they can't get me here. This land is safe for me and others like me." A simple phrase that brought no comfort as she left her room and walked to the lounge, a few other girls must've had trouble sleeping because she could hear the TV and the coffee machine. Not the best start to her new life, but much better than the alternative.



Last edited by Aednat on Thu Nov 17, 2016 5:42 pm; edited 5 times in total (Reason for editing : Grammar and fine tuning)

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2 Re: Aednat Shishune, sword maiden on Thu Nov 17, 2016 9:53 am

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I guess I bump it so you know I'm finished

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3 Re: Aednat Shishune, sword maiden on Thu Nov 17, 2016 5:05 pm

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Alright, I'm here to grade your app ^^

There are a few things that need to be changed about your semblance in order for me to approve you.

First of, you say that it is used to "shield herself or attack" but since it's a summon semblance it may confuse others to think that you can use it to summon as well as you it as offensive and defensive semblance. Just a little rewording just to be safe would be good ^^

Secondly, just saying that she only has access to her firebird doesn't work and you'll need to remove the other summons altogether.

Next, the utilitarian use will have to be dropped, although a good idea in my opinion, if your semblance is summoning, you cannot have any other type of semblance at your disposal (offence, defence, healing, etc). Also, giving a passive regen isn't something implemented as of now, but I'll see if we can implement it in the future, as it's something we totally haven't thought about.

Lastly, although this is more a note, even if your summon is made of fire, it cannot cause the burn status effect without the use of dust

That's for the semblance, but you'll also need 8 more words in your history, you're only at 292

Bump when edited ^^


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4 Re: Aednat Shishune, sword maiden on Thu Nov 17, 2016 5:24 pm

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LET THERE BE BUMPING

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5 Re: Aednat Shishune, sword maiden on Thu Nov 17, 2016 5:37 pm

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So, again with the semblance, if you want to summon, it is just the summon, those wisps are working like an utility an thus isn't allowed with your firebird.

Good news though, the cost to summon your firebird isn't 60, but 30, it's 5 per stat points, not 10

Bump when done ^^


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6 Re: Aednat Shishune, sword maiden on Thu Nov 17, 2016 5:43 pm

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LET THIS THREAD BE BUMPED

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7 Re: Aednat Shishune, sword maiden on Thu Nov 17, 2016 5:45 pm

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Those are the most epic bumps ever XD

Approved ^^


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