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1 Azrael Arch [FINISHED] on Sat Mar 25, 2017 3:26 am


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Basic Info
Name: Azrael R. Arch
Age: 18
Birthday: August, 21
Gender: Male
Race: Faunus (Faunus traits: wolf-like fangs, and wolf tail)
Height: 5'11
Weight: 137 lbs
Face claim: OC

Stats
Strength: 2
Defence: 4
Resistance: 3
Spirit: 3
Aura 150 HP 150

Personality
Major: Specialized hunter (Combat based)
Likes: Reading, Nature, And Adventure
Dislikes: Large crowds, People touching his books, And Just People In General
Fears: Tight Places, Caves, And Deep Water (like oceans and stuff like that)
Talent: Climbing
Weakness: Social Interaction
Overall Personality: Azrael is a quiet person even around friends and family but will speak if the situation asks for it. He is a person others would say as being cold, distant, or say that he ignores mostly everyone who tries to interact with him. Azrael can be seen reading most of the time or if he's not reading he can be found in trees or other places that can be accessed by climbing. If he is forced to talk he will speak in a low voice almost like he's whispering. If someone points out that his voice is too low he will try to raise it but will go quiet if someone forces him to speak out loud.

Abilities
Aura Type: Recovery
Aura Color: Black
Semblance: Enhanced Healing (This semblance gives the user the ability to dull the pain of wounds and it can do the same for allies but it is contact based as in the user of the semblance has to have contact with the wound for the semblance to take effect)
Item 1: Scythe that has a thin sharp edge that gets alittle wider the closer it gets to the top, has a skull near the base of the blade with a spine connecting the skull and the blade to the lower hilt, and has a ring at the bottom of the hilt that looks like a sun (like this: https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/736x/6f/08/57/6f0857113d71d787cb4327999280fdfe.jpg
Item 2: A black hoodie that is regular armour

History
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Azrael was a wolf faunus who lived in a small village which was a fair distance away from any major or well known city. The village was made up of mostly faunus with little to no humans. The village was like this because of the discrimination against the faunus people. But while azrael was there he wouldn't do much besides read or climb onto the walls surrounding the village and would get in trouble for it. When a couple years passed by azrael decided he would go to the city to get training from the hunters there so he could fight with his scythe better and more effectively against the creatures of grimm that plague his homeland. As he was traveling to the city he met up with a group made up of humans and faunus - though azrael thought the humans treated the faunus badly - heading to the city as well. He felt safer with them so he stayed with them though he didn't enjoy it at all. When the group finally reached the city they parted ways as they went straight to the school for training, and azrael just wandered around the city and looked at everything it had to offer. After he finished exploring he went to the school to enlist as a hunter-in-training and from then on he went on missions with others and as the months passed he got better at using his scythe and got better at using higher vantage points on the battlefield. He and the group he was with grew closer as friends but due to azrael's quiet nature and dislikeness of groups he would stay quiet and wouldn't say much. The others in the group would try to talk to him but as a response azrael would just nod or shrug. He would sometimes let friends borrow his books as well as show them the places he would climb to around the school so that he could read in peace or even rest there sometimes.

RP Example
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Azrael climbed onto a window sill using it as a foot hold to reach higher towards a part of the building that was jutting out just enough for him to grab onto it and hold on. As the young wolf faunus climbed higher he decided to make a quick stop to a friend's room, he reached the window sill leading to his friend's room and peeked in to see if anyone was there and he adjusted the cloth covering his mouth and nose to a more comfortable position. Seeing no other presence he decided it was safe so he snuck in and raided the friend's fridge for snacks. He was quick to gather as much as he could carry and he climbed back out of the window and shut it before continuing his climb to the school roof. When he finally got to the roof he started searching for a comfy spot to sit and read while eating snacks. After a while he fell asleep on the roof but he was in a location where he was the least likely to fall off of.



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2 Re: Azrael Arch [FINISHED] on Mon Mar 27, 2017 6:35 am

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Hey, welcome to the site ^^ Not 100% sure that this app is done but going to pop in just in case, in the future change the title to change finish or bump it to say it's finished if you are done. Regardless; the app is good but there are a few problems. First of all When it comes to FC it is the image or character you are basing your character's appearance of, seeing as you are using a generated original one you would just put "OC" or the like in there. Second, your stat points total to 14 when they should 12. Please fix this. Also, you do need to state your faunus trait next to your race as one is not obvious in the image you have used ^^

Next is an increase in description for your semblance based healing, is he simply regenerating his own biomass or is it like washing over damaged areas in soothing aura? Can he do it to other people? If so is it contact based or? These things do need answers ^^ Finally you do need to fit the spoilers onto your rp sample and history, though the wordcounts are fine. You're real close to done, mostly just some minor fixes, bump when done


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3 Re: Azrael Arch [FINISHED] on Mon Mar 27, 2017 12:40 pm


okai thank you ^^ I'll fix that as soon as I can and what do you mean by spoilers?

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4 Re: Azrael Arch [FINISHED] on Mon Mar 27, 2017 1:37 pm

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The spoiler tags that are used to house the rp sample and history, like you'll see on other applications. Just move what you've written into the boxes, on the toolbar with bold and such it's the notepad symbol with a warning sign on it. Just above the smiling face. Bump when done ^^


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5 Re: Azrael Arch [FINISHED] on Mon Mar 27, 2017 1:53 pm


okai I think I did it but what is bump?

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6 Re: Azrael Arch [FINISHED] on Mon Mar 27, 2017 2:05 pm

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Bump is just replying to a post like this or any ooc post, you may have nothing to do or say so you'll just post bump to get people's attention. You did it right. Only thing I see wrong now is in the fixed semblance description,

"This semblance has the ability to dull the pain of wounds without self and it can do the same for allies but it is contact based as in the user of the semblance has to have contact with the wound for the semblance to take place"

The "Without self" is the bit that confuses me. I think you mean "This semblance allows him to dull his wounds and it can...etc" I may be wrong though. rephrase the "Without self" bit and bump ^^


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7 Re: Azrael Arch [FINISHED] on Mon Mar 27, 2017 6:55 pm


ooooh okai sorry for this btw ^^ thank you for pointing this out and the "without self" was me forgetting to make sure I typed the semblance description right XD

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8 Re: Azrael Arch [FINISHED] on Tue Mar 28, 2017 4:09 am

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Oh oops, I forgot a last thing. My bad. I'm taking it you're meaning to make that hoodie your armour? if so you have to specify physical or dust resistant. Otherwise you do still need a second item. Bump when done ^^


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9 Re: Azrael Arch [FINISHED] on Tue Mar 28, 2017 11:23 am


okai uhm...I got a decent idea for it =3

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10 Re: Azrael Arch [FINISHED] on Thu Mar 30, 2017 12:35 am


BUMP

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11 Re: Azrael Arch [FINISHED] on Thu Mar 30, 2017 8:30 am

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Approved


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