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1 Noir Lavender Topaz on Sun Oct 15, 2017 1:52 am

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Basic info
Name: Noir Lavender Springfield
Age: 17
Birthday: 11/23
Gender: Male
Race: Faunus/wolf/Pricked ears
Height: 5'10
Weight: 150 pounds
Face Claim: Noir from tegami bachi

Stats
STR:4
DEF: 2
RES: 2
SPT: 4
Aura 200|100 HP

Personality
Major: Combat
Likes: Fighting, laughing, and games
Dislikes: Campers, rude people, and dominate women
Fears: spiders, abandonment, spirits
Talent:  Trapper/Trap Maker
Weakness Demolition Expert
Overall Personality: Despite Noir resting bitch face, he is a cheerful, optimistic, and flirty guy. He despises loneliness and constantly have feelings of abandonment which draws him to seek companionship from less than "reputable" people. Noir outlook on life is a weird one, he believes that the strong can lead due only to the fact that weak will follow those who are strong. Noir feels that school is a waste of time due to the fact that he live and travel with a huntsmen every since he was little. Although Noir came to understand why his father sent him here with his last words, Noir always quote the following, "The enemies are out there and they're not going to wait until I'm ready."    

Abilities
Aura type: Power
Aura Color: Lavender
Semblance: Hunting Grounds, Utility, Noir produces a thick fog of war which only he can see through, while Noir is in the fog his footsteps and breathing is muffled (you can still hear him slightly). When Noir is fog wrap (or in the fog) you aren't able to track his presence.
Item 1: Climbing Shoes, armor, equipment which allow user to climb, vault, and scale buildings with relative ease while protect. It's also slip resistant.
Item 2: Cross Tail, Is a thread device that hold 1 yard worth of string that is as strong as steel, the string can also be manipulate with the metal claws on the tips of the fingers. The string can be used to create traps, attach to weapons and people, and utility like things.


History and Sample
History:
Noir Springfield and his wife, Amethyst Springfield, were finally able to conceive a child after years of preparation, hope, and prayer. The couple lived in a small village off the coast of menagerie that consist of nothing but humans. The faunus couple who was disguise as work years to integrate themselves into the village. The only other faunus to enter in town is wandering faunus huntsmen or huntress who is either fulfilling a request or looking for work. Soon it would be almost time for amethyst to bear children the couple decided to ask of the help of their neighbor Sammy Goodkin who is more tolerant of faunus. When Sammy found out that the couple was faunus, she busted out the house sounding the alarm that they been infiltrated. Amethyst  begged Noir to carry the baby to safety while the villagers slowly surrounded the house, Noir refused his wife's request. His wife feeling she had no choice took a knife and ended her life. Noir stricken with grief took the child and ran from the house. The villagers shot him as he ran away but Noir protected the baby till he fell from exhaustion in the middle of the woods. A nearby hunter heard something heavy hit the ground and the soft cries of a baby. When the huntsmen found the two, the father was on the brink of death. he had numerous bullet holes, arrows prodding from his back, and a dagger or two embedded in his back. "My son...save him..." the father cough out. "name... Noir" the father said with a smile as the huntsmen took the baby from him. "Thank..you" the father said before closing his eyes for the last time. From that day on that huntsmen adopted Noir, never telling the child of how his real parents died. The huntsmen gave him a middle name and his surname. As the years went by, Topaz(the huntsmen) decided it was time for his son to decide what path he wants to go down. Topaz in-rolled his son at signal academy where he graduate to enter Syne Academy. 
RP Sample:
"You know despite what everyone says about me, I'm a nice guy you know? I like to crack jokes just like any other dude or girl yet no one will approach me. I've been told by my father, I have a lot of someone who is very dangerous and I carry myself like I don't want to be bothered but in fact I want to be bothered by people. Interactions between people wither fanus or human... It's all the same we thrive on some form of human interactions and frankly I think i'm going a bit mad." He laugh awkwardly in front of the mirror. "Man, I need to make some friends... dad would worry less if he knew I had friends I could count on." Noir walk out the bathroom giving his room an once over before he decided on leaving. "I just i'll go to the cafe and hopefully someone would take interest in me."



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2 Re: Noir Lavender Topaz on Sun Oct 15, 2017 8:10 am

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Hey welcome to the site, this app is good but there are a couple things that need fixed up ^^First and easiest is that you have specified faunus, with no clear indication of your trait. You do need to specify that next to your race ^^ You have one more stat point yet to distribute. Next, and I think most difficult, is word counts? You have not reached the required wordcounts for personality, history or rp sample ^^ Next, just a couple things on semblance, while not a problem to make sure you know the maximum range of your smog would be a ten meter radius; and I am a little confused by some of the wording of your semblance. Specifically "while his presence is erasure." There are a couple cases like these, you may want to do a couple scans of your app just to make things 100% clear. And just to be clear, while you could have it muffle the sound sound would not be 100% removed by the semblance ^^

Finally, in regard to your weapon "Cross Tail" while you could do weapon damage to the string slashing with the claws themselves would only do your base strength damage.

Bump when done


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3 Re: Noir Lavender Topaz on Sun Oct 15, 2017 2:46 pm

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A simple bump

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4 Re: Noir Lavender Topaz on Sun Oct 15, 2017 3:04 pm

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You have specified a type of faunus but not a trait which is what's required ^^ You have also not met the required word count on your rp sample. Also, looking at your history and from an in universe perspective, I have an addendum that I strongly recommend; that being you state the village was on an island off the coast of Menagerie rather than on Menagerie itself. This is based on the size of Menagerie and how cramped it has been mentioned to be in the show. Bump when done


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5 Re: Noir Lavender Topaz on Sun Oct 15, 2017 4:22 pm

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Bump you with it two time

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6 Re: Noir Lavender Topaz on Mon Oct 16, 2017 10:42 am

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