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2 Re: Seraphim blance on Tue Oct 31, 2017 7:31 am

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Okay, there are a couple problems with this app that need fixed ^^ The first comes in your likes and fears, while not quite the same there is too much overlap between murder and violence as well as between ghosts and haunting.You can keep them but you do need to add an unrelated addition to each category. Second would be your claim of high rank within the white fang, you are unable to order another member of the group unless they specifically state themselves to be ordered. I recommend removing mention of rank entirely ^^

Next would be the semblance, while I wouldn't dub it "Bloodline prowess" passed on through family semblances are fine however your costs do not fit with those in the rules. Utility actions are 10 aura per post. Also your def debuff does not relate to the other aspects of your semblance (not to mention goes against sound being in the banned rules) so it needs removed. Finally what you've dubbed as a buff would actually come under semblance damage. The aura cost is 20 for 20 damage per attack using it, gaining a conjured in that way is semblance damage rather than buff ^^

Also just as a note, though I'm sure you wouldn't do this, you can't just have the "God" you've mentioned affect things in the world outside perhaps from your perspective, you can't just use it as a get out of jail card ^^ Also in regards to your history and the murders you have committed... do realise that walking about in the open may be difficult, you can cover up one or two murders sure but if you started at 16 that's 4 bodies at a minimum. With that in mind you may want to stay away from the academy and it's security system.


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