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1 Project Quill (Finished) on Thu Jul 19, 2018 6:46 pm

Quill Darwind
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Basic info
Name: Quill
Age: 19
Birthday: 1/25
Gender: Male
Race: Android
Height: 7' standing up, 5' on all fours
Weight: 546 LBS
Face Claim: Fan frame design

STR: 5
DEF: 5
RES: 1
SPT: 1
Aura 100|200 HP

Major: Civilian
Likes: Catching fish, Hunting game, and sun bathing
Dislikes: Needles, the open ocean, and restrictions
Fears: Dark cold water, stormy boat rides, and needles
Talent: Hunting
Weakness Speech
Overall Personality: Quill thinks of both like a man and a beast, he is able to solve complex task that would need the thinking power of a human and is able to brutally attack someone without needing to think on what to do. Most of the time he will be following a master but he does not have a master at the moment making him roam around until he can fine a master that is worthy of his abilities. He tends to hunt down wild life to consume them do to his bio reactor that needs organic matter or food like chips and candy, he mostly enjoys hunting for himself but will get money to buy candy when he want some.

Aura type: Power
Aura Color: Green
Semblance appearance:
Buff: Using the energy that is coming off its body, Quill is able to increase his strength by 2 points able to cause more damage then normal. The energy comes from a artificial organ called the Influx organ which generates energy similar of that of aura. Once the ability is used the energy becomes more visible and can be seen as light markings on Quill's body.

Utility: Quill is able to highlight items or trails that was touched by person of interest using their scent, this heightens the smell based tracking for him and is able to make it easy to track down the person or thing of interest. This is thanks to the Influx organ which channels the energy to let Quill see the highlighted areas.

Item 1: Brutal claws: (physical melee weapon) A pair of claws weapons that are chainsaw like weapons, it can retract into the storage unit that houses it.
Brutal claws:

Item 2: Exoskeleton: (physical armor) The skin of Quill acts like armor which protects him from incoming attacks, after the battle is done it self repairs itself.

History and Sample
nineteen years ago project QUILL was on the way, the people on the project hoped to make a perfect protector and servant from this project. What they got is what you see now, the bio android they call Quill. His primary function is to do as his master says but it seems that he chooses who is his master, his first master was a woman name Victoria Otterclaw. Quill seemed to like her more then anyone else that he could pick from, sadly she was killed by someone who wanted Quill to themselves so they can bring justice to those's in need, but they were killed by Quill shortly afterward. For a while he roamed the main land for a long time, people thought he was a new kind of grimm and tried to kill him because of that, soon they classed him as a normal monster and not a grimm. How he got to Bellmuse is another story on its own, one day he sunk aboard a ship that seemed to be docked there for months unend, he thought it was abandon, so he found a good hiding spot in it little did he know that it was not abandon. While he was sleeping, the ship took off to Bellmuse, he was awoken when a storm hit the ship, it freaked him out so much that he ran outside to see what was going on, this intern freaked out the crew as well. One of the crewmen manage to knock Quill into the cold, dark, storming ocean where he lost consents after slamming his head onto the boat. He then woke up on Kompress beach when some little kid was poking him with a stick, he then fled into the forest where he is know until he finds a new master.
RP Sample:
During a hunt Quill had seen some fishes that looked a bit strange, they seemed to no be movie normally but like they were fake then he saw the string on the fish and looked up to see some people fishing. They all pulled out guns and started to fire at him but they were weak rifles and the bullets bounced off of his exoskeleton armor but one hit hard and right though the armor. It was a huntress which a high powered rifle, lucky for Quill he was able to escape to lick his wounds though it did not take the huntress long to track him down and attack him yet again. The battle was long and hard but Quill manage to beat her bit the skin of his... What ever he had that was equal to teeth. But know he will need to find a new spot to hunt and sleep in or the huntress will just bring back stronger hunters and attack yet again.

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2 Re: Project Quill (Finished) on Fri Jul 20, 2018 12:19 pm

Richard Lionheart
Alright, this app is good but there are a couple key issues in regards to the semblance. The issue is that the things aren't part of one skillset derived from one thing, what you have done is not like for example earth manipulation where lifting a rock before you to defend or throwing it to attack or holding it before you to make a stepping stone all use the same power. You've listed a strength buff, the ability to debuff defence in an area and increased tracking. That is more comparable to the ability to manipulate rocks as an attack, but also make it so you can see very far, to give another example of a skillset that wouldn't be allowed.

If you can figure out how to get all three to worked derived from one thing, which I cannot, then it would be allowed. The other issue with the semblance though is that the strength buff and the debuff aren't explained in what happens, you've explained them on a meta level but not an IC level. You must do the latter to ^^

What I would recommend to you is that you drop the def debuff and centre the semblance around becoming more beast-like, so when you drop on all fours your strength does increase in that you have essentially changed mode from more human to more animalistic; your body accounting for that. Additionally this could be used to justify the tracking you have described, though the idea that you can "Highlight a trail left behind" wouldn't be a semblance thing and would be more looking for clues. The increased spell would be however, as utility. Oh additionally I'd maybe recommend a weapon you can actually use as an animal, granted you could get a from two later on that lets it be used more in the four legged form. Bump when done

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3 Re: Project Quill (Finished) on Fri Jul 20, 2018 2:40 pm

Quill Darwind
I removed the utility but i am not removing the debuff or changing it to a "beast mode" because i don't want to make a beast mode. Another thing is that I will be keeping the weapon i have chosen to use because that is the weapon I chose, and a weapon that would fit a "beast mode" would be clawed gauntlets which i don't want to use them for this character.

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4 Re: Project Quill (Finished) on Fri Jul 20, 2018 2:48 pm

Richard Lionheart
Okay but I explained the issue was that the semblance was like two separate pieces that do different things rather than one piece that can do two different things, and again you haven't explained why the debuff happens or even what this energy source does to provide the strength buff. Those issues are the reason I suggested a more beast like mode, that would be one thing that explains both aspects. Removing the tracking sense does not fix the issue with your semblance I raised.

Of course you can keep the weapon but bare in mind using it while on all fours wouldn't really be possible; that is the only reason I raised it ^^ By animal I meant your quadruped form, because it's not like you've got a free hand to swing a sword while on all fours. Bump when done.

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5 Re: Project Quill (Finished) on Fri Jul 20, 2018 3:02 pm

Quill Darwind
I change the weapons, took out the debuff and added in a better version of the utility.

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6 Re: Project Quill (Finished) on Fri Jul 20, 2018 6:44 pm

Richard Lionheart

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